Engelsk stil [Hvilken karaker får jeg?]

[Unitedman1]

Hei, jeg skrev en engelsk stil i hastverk i natta, jeg glemte å skrive det. Men sånn ble den:
The Jewelry Store
It was 10 minutes after midnight, when the whole city heard the jewelry store alarm ringing. Chris Taylor was 5 year old. Only he saw a black dressed man escape from the jewelry store. People ran to the store. A police car on patrol drove to the store. The policeman prevented all to look thorough
The window.
The next morning, the owner of the jewelry came to see what the thief had stolen from his store. His name was Michael. He saw that the thief had stolen a golden necklace, it was worth more than 9 airplanes, 52 Lamborghinis and 10 boats. 3 hours later, Michael was been killed, his throat was slashed. LAPD couldn’t find any clues, they called Federal Bureau Investigation, but it was to no avail. The police decided to ask the witnesses. No one knew anything, before
A little boy came in front of the large crowd, the boy was thin, had black hair, exhausted t-shirt, and blue pants. The boy said that he saw a big, fat man who escaped from the jewelry. The FBI knew that the motive was to steal the necklace, but why did he killed the jewelry owner? The FBI asked friends of Michael..they heard that a guy would kill Michael if Michael don’t give him his golden necklace. 6 years later a man confessed that he killed Michael. The police jailed the murder for 101 years..but the murder died..the murder is now haunting the police station.
Hvilken karaket tror dere jeg får?

[brukernavn]

hvor gammel er du? 2

[Unitedman1]

Eh..om du syns dette var dårlig, så har jeg skrevet det i hastverk, satt oppe halve natta å skrev..jeg kan bedre en det der.
Men jeg går i 8.klasse

[brukernavn]

vis du er så liten og skrevet det der i 8 er det sikert en 3

[Smisker nr 1]

Brukernavn, det var ikke noe hyggelig!

Jeg går også i 8. klasse:) Min lærer ville nok gitt deg en 5 eller 4+

BRA JOBBET!

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